1. My purpose is through an experience of listening to music with headphone ofr a period of time----and have some trouble with it-----then begin researching the argument: the sound produced by headphones. The audience of this paper is college students and those people who use headphones. To develope the essay, my strategy is find the problem---know what is the problem----and how to solve the problem. And after the draft, i add more "my words" into the paper to explain more about the "site words" and express my opinion more.
2.I provide my own experience to pull the argument out, and through the research i know the problem and which is a clear path. Although i still need to explain more arguments in order to connect the essay.
3. I think istill need to point out the argument clearer at the begining not "start" to tell the argument at the middle of the essay. I still need to do better work on the grammar mistake. I needs to add more conclusion at the end of the essay, and avoid using strange sentences and words.
